effective and ineffective comments
Moves 1. We all knew of the SAT, for instance, but had no concrete idea of how to prepare for it. This is the result of no single staff member dedicated to helping students apply to college. However, the writer write about this move before blame no staff member. It is because to show a strict result first can give some thinking, more importantly, it explain how small things cause a big problem step by step. 2. We were also on our own As a student, we can not do too many things by ourselves. The words “ also ” shows as a poor student they need to do somethings that they shouldn ’ t do. 3. I almost missed out on qualifying for aid because I couldn ’ t get the forms I needed from my mother, who was still my legal guardian. This moves shows the writer still not give up. The word “ still ” shows the realistic is cruel. 4. I was not alone This moves shows it ’ s not a rare phenomenon. And it shows the how big group of st...
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